Laura and Petrarch

A dissonant character sonnet

Deprive him of thrive,
the rugged barbarian,
let her be more alive,
the tender vegetarian.

Let him moan
frustration from shore to shore,
let her groan
with a need for more.

Let him become a little listless,
isolated on a remote isle,
let her develop some bristles
to make him walk the extra mile.

Let those deeds all be done
and soon they’ll be one.

– Felix Morgenstern (© 2011)

For day 15 of NaPoWriMo, the task was to write a sonnet. Well, here is mine, with claptrap rhyme and full of helpful suggestions for an ancient couple.

Since I was asked: The rhyme scheme used here follows the Shakespearean or English sonnet, while the meter does not.


vivinfrance said...

No bristles, please! A fun sonnet.

Stan Ski said...

Now that's a real life love story!

Anonymous said...

Great attempt! I couldn't do it.

Ron. said...

Still, and (as always) true love will out, eh?

Judy Roney said...

What a great job! Love your Laura and Petrarch love story.

Andy Sewina said...

Love the end line rhymes, when you read just those fourteen words it makes for another good poem.

Gloria said...

I enjoyed your sonnet very much. This is an American sonnet isn't it? I've only done the English Sonnet with iambic pentameter, and I want to try this because I like how well it flows. Good job!